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The pie charts below show the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006, and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The pie charts below show the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006, and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The pie charts, there are three pie charts in a gap of a decade
that is
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 1996, 2006, and 2016, which include the
informations
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information
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 related to languages
which
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apply
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spoke
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spoken
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 by natives of
the
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Canada. In overview, in all three terms,
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the english
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english
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English
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language
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 is spoken by over
a
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apply
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half of
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the popultion
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popultion
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population
 of the country.
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, it
include
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french
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French
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 and
other
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the other
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 one is
non-official
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a non-official
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language
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,
meanwhile
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 both
are display
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are displayed
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 as a minor vocal in comparison
of
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to
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english
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. In 1996,
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english
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holds
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held
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 60% of citizens in speaking, to compare, in 2006, it slightly decreased
at
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to
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 58%
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that
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which
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 is
also
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a
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1% more than
the
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in the
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 year 2016. In the total term of the 30 years, analysing a bit
difference
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of difference
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 but, it is spoken by
majority
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a majority
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 of the public.
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french
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French
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 is
cummunicate
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communicated
communicate
 by 23% of
canadian
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Canadian
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, meanwhile, it declined by 1%,
as
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compare
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compared
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 with Non-official speech, it rose by 3%,
while
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 in the report of 2016, french slightly decreased by 1%, surprisingly, Non-official tounge again added 1 more percentage. local communication is only one category which gradually
increased
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increases
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by
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with
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 every single term, resemblance, other both
speechs
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speeches
speech
are had
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have
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a
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an
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 irregularity
by
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apply
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every ten years. In conclusion,
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english
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English
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 is the most familiar
language
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 amongst major mankind, meanwhile, others are considerable as
a non-popular vocals
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a non-popular vocal
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.
Also
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,
unauthorised
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the unauthorised
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 tongue is only the
language
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 which increased
in
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every ten years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words english, language with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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