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The bar chart shows the data of five portions of fruit and vegetables eaten by children, males and females per day in the UK between 2001 and 2008.

The bar chart shows the data of five portions of fruit and vegetables eaten by children, males and females per day in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
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The bar chart describes information about how many
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 were eaten by children, men and women per day for 8 years from 2001 to 2008 in the UK. The most significant facts to emerge from the chart are that the biggest
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fruits
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fruit
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 and
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vegetables
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vegetable
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 consumption
were
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was
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women
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by women
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while
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 children experienced
opposite
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 over the period. Another interesting point is that all categories showed a rise in almost all the period. Looking at the details, women who ate
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 stood at 21% in 2001 next there was gradually a growth to 30% in 2004.
Following
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this
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,
this
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 figure reached a high of 35% in 2006 but it decreased steadily
about
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 3% in 2008.
On the other hand
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,
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 consumed by children and men per day had similar trends about 12% and 17% respectively for 3 years.
Subsequently
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, from 2004 to 2007 witnessed a steady rise in the consumption of
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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.
Whereas
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, those dropped slowly to 25% and 27% each in 2008

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fruits, vegetables with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumption trends
  • Demographics
  • Public health campaigns
  • Per capita
  • Consumption patterns
  • Nutritional intake
  • Statistical analysis
  • Dietary habits
  • Health recommendations
  • Daily servings
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