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The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates why
people
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 use bicycles or
cars
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 to reach their workplace with five different reasons for each mode.
Overall
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, around a quarter of workers prefer cycling as it emits less pollution.
In addition
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, the same quantity of individuals choose it because of their health and fitness.
While
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 around
doubled
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 of
people
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 prefer
cars
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 because of their comfort. looking at the details, around 14 per cent of
people
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 said
cars
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 are faster than cycling,
while
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 other
people
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 choose
cars
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 to carry things to their jobs. another interesting point is there are around double of
people
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 who like
cars
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 because of the distance to work. It can be seen that around 15% and 13% prefer cycling because of no costs and no issues with parking.
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, around 12% of
people
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 said that cycling is faster than driving . another point is that around halved of
people
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 think
cars
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 are safer than cycling
therefore
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 they prefer
cars
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 7 times.
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