More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other items from famous brands. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
People
’s obsession Use synonyms
on
brands has Change preposition
with
been
increased more in recent times, Unnecessary verb
apply
Majority
of Correct article usage
The Majority
people
want to buy branded Use synonyms
items
Use synonyms
such
as clothes, cars and other Linking Words
items
to fulfil their desires, I believe, it is a negative development Use synonyms
on
society as it could increase the financial burden and affect our Change preposition
in
environment
in negative ways.
Observing others owning luxury materialistic things can put Use synonyms
a
negative pressure on those who fail to Remove the article
apply
afford
. Correct pronoun usage
afford them
This
means, Linking Words
for
those Change preposition
that
middle class
and Add a hyphen
middle-class
low class
individuals who live in Add a hyphen
low-class
rented
Add an article
a rented
house
and only have a basic salary to only buy basic Fix the agreement mistake
houses
items
like food, clothing, Use synonyms
water
Correct word choice
and water
such
Linking Words
people
, can possibly develop Use synonyms
desires
to buy the same Fix the agreement mistake
desire
stuffs
which other rich Change the wording
stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
people
can easily afford. Use synonyms
In
Change preposition
As
result
, Correct article usage
a result
this
can easily put Linking Words
financial
burden on them which could affect their Add an article
a financial
the financial
overall
health. Linking Words
For instance
, my friend Atul who works in a corporate office, earns only 2000$ per month but, wishes to own a car Linking Words
having
worth 40000$ Unnecessary verb
apply
for
just because his colleague has bought it. Change preposition
apply
Therefore
, the race of owning branded Linking Words
items
by affluent folks negatively influences normal basic pay Use synonyms
people
resulting in financial debt and mental pressure if failed to pay the asked price.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, the production of branded clothing and other Linking Words
items
damages our Use synonyms
environment
. Use synonyms
This
is to say, the consumption of branded Linking Words
items
leads to its over manufacture by companies for Use synonyms
its
consumers, which Correct pronoun usage
their
in
Change preposition
as
result
accumulates more in number on our Correct article usage
a result
environment
as it doesn’t decompose easily. Use synonyms
For example
, Linking Words
the
clothing brand like H and M produces more than a million clothes in a year for its customers, in Correct article usage
apply
which
all products are not bought by Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
so the remaining ones are tried to burn which pollutes our Use synonyms
environment
. Use synonyms
Therefore
, greater use of branded Linking Words
items
has Use synonyms
an
negative impact on our nature too.
In conclusion, the use of branded Change the article
a
items
definitely has a negative development on our health and Use synonyms
environment
Use synonyms
both
, so measures to effectively reduce its consumption and production should be implemented.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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