You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter - explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months - say how your work could be done while you are away - ask for his/her help in arranging it
Dear Mr. Jackson,
I am writing
this
letter to request that you can
aid me Verb problem
apply
to adjust
my Change preposition
in adjusting
work
position as I want to work
in other nations.
First of all, one of the main reasons why l want to work
in the company's head office
is that my daily routine is all messed up these days due to
my colleagues' work
pressure in my office
. At the same time, I believe that l can't keep a good earning condition under such
as
environment, which means may Correct your spelling
an
effects
my working efficiency Verb problem
affect
cause
the business benefit. Correct word choice
and cause
Therefore
, I hope to go to company's
head Correct article usage
the company's
office
to express my professional working ability,
and learn more useful knowledge.
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Moreover
, I would be greatly grateful if you could agree my
request. Meanwhile, I would arrange Change preposition
to my
an
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for an
office
friend to take my place for the next six months. She has extremely technical working ability and is familiar with the work
content of my station. So I think this
is a
right choice. Correct article usage
the
Furthermore
, I would appreciate if
you could send me some details on another job Correct pronoun usage
it if
targets
the business's hand Wrong verb form
targeting
office
.
Finally
, I am looking forward from
hearing you, and if you need any Change preposition
to from
further
information, please do not hesitate to contact me, as l am pleased to supply.
Yours faithfully,
NehaSubmitted by cyh000823 on
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task achievement
Try to avoid repetition and be clear about your reasons in the first instance. For example, clarify why exactly you want to work in the head office—mention learning opportunities and professional growth straight away.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph clearly addresses a single idea to improve the logical structure. For example, dedicate one paragraph to the reasons, another to how the work will be managed in your absence, and a third to requesting assistance.
task achievement
The letter appropriately requests assistance, explains the reasons, and outlines how the work will be managed in your absence.
coherence cohesion
The use of greeting and closing is polite and appropriate for a formal letter.