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The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of males and females who worked as academic
staff
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members
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 in the major universities divided into
faculties
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 in 2016.
Overall
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,
women
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 were the biggest percentage who worked in any
faculties
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 and it can be seen that in engineering
faculties
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 females became the highest proportion rather than
men
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,
while
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 in education
men
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 were the highest than
women
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. In detail, the highest percentage of
women
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 who worked in any
faculties
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 were in engineering, business, science, and law. The engineering
department
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 accounted for the most dominant with
women
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 who worked as academic
staff
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members
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 were 85% rather than
men
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 at around 18%,
this
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 was a small percentage for
men
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. Followed by the business
department
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 around 62% of the academic
staff
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members
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 were
women
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while
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men
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 only 35%, same with the science
department
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 where 62% of
women
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 worked as academic
staff
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 there and for
men
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 only half of
women
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.
Besides
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 that, in the medicine
department
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, the total of
men
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 and
women
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 working in
this
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department
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 was almost the same around 50%, 50% for
men
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 and 49% for
women
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.
In contrast
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, in the education
department
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, males had the highest proportion working as academic
staff
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members
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 rather than
women
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 about 72% and
women
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 only 25%,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 in the art
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department
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department,
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 there were 58% of males worked as academic
staff
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while
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women
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 only 42%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words staff, members, faculties, women, men, department with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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