In many counties people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disagvantages?

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birth rate, the elderly are dying.
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the number of low fertility rates, it can have some disadvantages as well. I would argue that
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sides of
this
can
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outweigh
the negatives. In my
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opinion
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opinion
, the presence of older
people
is a benefit to society. On the one hand, there are several benefits of old age. The first merit of it is considered to be that older
people
are more experienced.
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, they
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many lives and benefit
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the family
that is
because they get a pension.
As well as
they take care of their grandchildren. Another positive aspect is thought to be that old
people
cherish national values and they
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practice
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them.
That is
because old
people
set an example for young children.
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us in the spirit of patriotism. They can set a good example for the youth with
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work.
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, despite
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positives,
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drunk causes some problems.
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of the major disadvantages of it is that old
people
get sick a lot.
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, because they are ill, it will harm the family and the
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government budget
also
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them a lot of medicine,
together with
this
old
people
could be cared
.
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Another important demerit is that old
people
can live for 30 years even after retirement which is a loss for the
goverment budjet
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government budget
.
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is because they
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be
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paid
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for another 30 years at the same time , they want to work even after retirement which
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eliminates
limits
limited
the
oppornities
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opportunities
of young
people
. In conclusion,
while
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the aging
the
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elderly is
low
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birth rate of children can offer several positives, there may be some drawbacks too. From my personal point of view
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the advantages
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of
this
will outweigh the disadvantages.
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