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The char below shows that number of households in the USA by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

#char #households #usa #income
The bar chart
illustrate
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 the annual indicators earned
of
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by
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households
 where the US
by
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in
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 2007,2011 and 2015. The numbers show how changed
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within
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with in
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within
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 millions
Overall
 the lowest and high-income
households
 experienced steeper growth than
middle-incomes
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middle-income
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.
Furthermore
, the most significant difference in millions between four years. In terms number of $100,000
households
 when after a sharp drop in 2011, it peaked again in 2015, even higher than in 2007. And
a
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similar processes are experienced by the two lowest-income
households
, which are
households
 with an income of 25,000 and above 49,000. Their highest figure was observed in 2011, and in 2015 it will be slightly closer to the figure of 2007.
On the other
hand
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 the amount of two similar indicators which are 75,000-99,000 and 50,000-74,000 incomes received minor changes. Household earnings above 75,000 decreased,
while
 incomes above 50,000 increased slightly
by
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period
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a period
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years
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of years
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.
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
The response covers the main trends in the data, but some specific details are either inaccurate or missing. Check the data more carefully and include all relevant points.
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Some ideas in the essay are not fully developed or clearly expressed. Spend more time planning your response to ensure clarity and logical flow in your arguments.
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Clear mention of data points and trends from the chart shows that you have a good understanding of the data.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is logically divided into paragraphs based on different income brackets and their trends, which aids understanding.

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