The char below shows that number of households in the USA by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

The bar chart
illustrate
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the annual indicators earned
of
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households
where the US
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2007,2011 and 2015. The numbers show how changed
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within
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with in
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within
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millions
Overall
the lowest and high-income
households
experienced steeper growth than
middle-incomes
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.
Furthermore
, the most significant difference in millions between four years. In terms number of $100,000
households
when after a sharp drop in 2011, it peaked again in 2015, even higher than in 2007. And
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similar processes are experienced by the two lowest-income
households
, which are
households
with an income of 25,000 and above 49,000. Their highest figure was observed in 2011, and in 2015 it will be slightly closer to the figure of 2007.
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the amount of two similar indicators which are 75,000-99,000 and 50,000-74,000 incomes received minor changes. Household earnings above 75,000 decreased,
while
incomes above 50,000 increased slightly
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period
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years
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.
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