The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of

new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the
number
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of retail
store
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closures
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and
openings
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from 2011 to 2018, highlighting fluctuations over
this
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period. In 2011, 8,500 stores closed,
while
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6,500 new stores opened. By 2012, the
number
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of
closures
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dropped sharply to 4,000, and the
number
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of
openings
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also
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decreased slightly to 6,000. Between 2013 and 2014, there was a steady increase in new
store
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openings
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from 4,000 in 2012 to 6,000 in 2014. Meanwhile, the
number
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of
store
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closures
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rose to 7,200 in 2013 before falling back to 6,500 in 2014, resulting in more
closures
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than
openings
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for that year. In 2015, both figures plummeted, with
store
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closures
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reaching their lowest point at 500, and new
store
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openings
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also
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dropping significantly to 4,000. From 2015 to 2017, the
number
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of
closures
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stabilized at
this
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low level,
while
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the
number
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of new stores started to rise in 2016 to 5,000, remaining constant until 2018.
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, in the final year,
store
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openings
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declined again to 3,000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, store, closures, openings with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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