The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of

new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the
number
of retail
store
closures
and
openings
from 2011 to 2018, highlighting fluctuations over
this
period. In 2011, 8,500 stores closed,
while
6,500 new stores opened. By 2012, the
number
of
closures
dropped sharply to 4,000, and the
number
of
openings
also
decreased slightly to 6,000. Between 2013 and 2014, there was a steady increase in new
store
openings
from 4,000 in 2012 to 6,000 in 2014. Meanwhile, the
number
of
store
closures
rose to 7,200 in 2013 before falling back to 6,500 in 2014, resulting in more
closures
than
openings
for that year. In 2015, both figures plummeted, with
store
closures
reaching their lowest point at 500, and new
store
openings
also
dropping significantly to 4,000. From 2015 to 2017, the
number
of
closures
stabilized at
this
low level,
while
the
number
of new stores started to rise in 2016 to 5,000, remaining constant until 2018.
However
, in the final year,
store
openings
declined again to 3,000.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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