Task 1: The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009.

The given maps illustrate how the ground floor of the library changed after some development and changes during the period from 2001 to 2009.
Overall
, the library’s ground floor was heavily modified, with the addition of a diverse collection of books and the inclusion of modern amenities. There were two computers in the plan in 2009,
nonetheless
before eight years they were non-existence. On the west bookcases in the year 2001, there were two kinds of books
such
as
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and history.
However
, those bookcases were divided into six sections which added four new book sections including laws, economics,
fictions
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and kitchen in the year 2009. During the period from 2001 to 2009, the librarian’s desk and stairs remained unchanged. Looking at the wall opposite
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the entrance, the fiction bookcase was located in the year 2001,
however
, after eight years, that area had an extension and a conversion to the
children
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area and children’s books. At the centre of the ground floor of the library, eight original tables were extended to four longer ones. The old bookcases on the right hand
was
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used for newspapers and periodicals in 2001,
nevertheless
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in
2009
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2009,
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that bookcase
used
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for Films and DVDs.
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