The line graph below shows the number of serious crimes that occurred in London between 2003 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the number of serious crimes that occurred in London

between 2003 and 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
number
of Amed
Robbery
, Assault , and
Murder
that
happend
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happened
happen
in London between the years 2003
until
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and
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2012 .
Overall
,
in
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at
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the
beggining
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beginning
of the
period
, Amed
Robbery
had the highest
number
of crimes . As
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opposed
oppossed
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opposed
to Mudrer which had the lowest amount .
however
, Assaults had outraced the
number
of Amed
Robbery
in
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the end of the
period
,
while
murder
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had a steady range. In 2003 , both
robbery
and
murder
had an upward trend for
short
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a short
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period
of time .
whereas
, around the year 2004 they had a
down fall
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downfall
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.
robbery
and
murder
had reached their lowest point in 2008, at 1000 and 500 respectively . In terms of the
number
of
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assault
assult
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assult,
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it started at the beginning of the
period
approximatley
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approximately
around 2300 ,
then
it fluctuated over the 5 years until 2008 ,
were
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where
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it experienced a stable upward trend .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, robbery, murder, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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