You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.
The advancement of technology has changed the way
people
reading
wide information, leaving the Wrong verb form
read
newspapers
and moving to
online Change preposition
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instead
. I firmly believe that online articles and magazines become more effective and cheaper than the
paper media. Correct article usage
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This
essay will elucidate about
the reasons and agreements of which Change preposition
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newspapers
have been changed to online.
On the one hand, websites and applications provide a lot
information about up-to-date world circumstances, thanks to the internet. As the internet Add the preposition
lot of
enable
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enables
people
to connect with all people
around the world, news
can be published to
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on
the
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website
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websites
such
as BBC News
or Tempo where
readers can access through their smartphones. Correct word choice
which
Therefore
, people
do not have to wait for a long time until the news
is handed to them like newspapers
do. To elaborate more, companies in this
media field need long
time to print and publish Change the article
a long
newspaper
before Fix the agreement mistake
newspapers
sell
them to Change the verb form
selling
the
customers.
On the one hand, the publication of online Correct article usage
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news
or magazines can save much money when it utilizes internet
compared to Correct article usage
the internet
this
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on
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newspapers
which need high
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a high
the high
cost
for production including printing Fix the agreement mistake
costs
expanses
and distributing Correct your spelling
expenses
expanses
from fabrics to communities. Correct your spelling
expenses
Therefore
, many media companies that used to sell newspaper
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newspapers
change
to online. Wrong verb form
changed
This
occurrence in Indonesia like Tribun Timur and Kompas is a
proof that Change the article
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newspaper
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newspapers
has
been considered Correct subject-verb agreement
have
as
a thing of the past that in the near future will not be totally used anymore.
In conclusion, Change preposition
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due to
the fact that online news
become more effective to access and cheaper to publish, both readers and publishers have leaved
the Correct your spelling
left
newspapers
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task achievement
Strengthen your introduction by providing a clearer thesis statement. For instance, state explicitly whether you agree, disagree, or partly agree with the statement.
coherence cohesion
To enhance logical structure, break down your paragraphs with clear topic sentences and supporting details. For example, if discussing cost efficiency, start with a clear topic sentence like, 'One significant advantage of online news is its cost efficiency.'
coherence cohesion
Include transitions between ideas and paragraphs to improve the flow of your essay. Using linking words like 'Moreover,' 'Additionally,' and 'However,' can help guide your reader through your arguments.
task achievement
The essay presents clear reasons for the decline of newspapers, such as cost efficiency and immediate access to information.
task achievement
The essay includes appropriate examples, like the mention of BBC News and news publishers in Indonesia, which add relevance and specificity.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and clearly states the writer's perspective.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite