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The charts below show the amount of financial help that four countries received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the amount of financial help that four countries received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart represents aspects and years
which
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in which
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 countries gave monetary support. The table below displays the number of
money
 spent by all 4 nations. By looking at the bar chart, we can already see, that after 40 years, governments spent way less
money
 on these industries.
For example
,
amount
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the amount
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 of
money
 spent on finance decreased just a little bit. Speaking about medicine, it got lower
more
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but not that much.
However
,
catering
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the catering
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 aspect just went down drastically. The table shows us information about the amount of
money
 and regions. Every
nations
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nation
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have
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has
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 reduced their
spendings
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spending
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 on certain aspects. Indonesia and South Africa lowered their finances the least, with the results of 23 and 25 million dollars. Thailand invested 30 million dollars less in these 4 decades.
However
, China reduced a whole 56 million dollars from investment to these aspects. These results are not that surprising. Because there are many more new
techlonogies
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technologies
 and industries that are coming up to our view and they
also
 need a starting investment. So,
government
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the government
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 has to split
all
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the budget and focus on each aspect
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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