The charts below show the amount of financial help that four countries received and how the money was spent in 1974 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The bar chart represents aspects and years

which

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in which

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countries gave monetary support. The table below displays the number of

money

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spent by all 4 nations. By looking at the bar chart, we can already see, that after 40 years, governments spent way less

money

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on these industries.

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amount

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the amount

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money

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spent on finance decreased just a little bit. Speaking about medicine, it got lower

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but not that much.

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catering

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aspect just went down drastically. The table shows us information about the amount of

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and regions. Every

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have

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reduced their

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on certain aspects. Indonesia and South Africa lowered their finances the least, with the results of 23 and 25 million dollars. Thailand invested 30 million dollars less in these 4 decades.

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, China reduced a whole 56 million dollars from investment to these aspects. These results are not that surprising. Because there are many more new

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technologies

and industries that are coming up to our view and they

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need a starting investment. So,

government

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has to split

all

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the budget and focus on each aspect

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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