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Young people learn more about good behaviour from books or films/movies than they learn from real-life experiences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Youngsters experience well-behaved characteristics more from books and movies than actual experiences. I partially agree with
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, some guests come to their relatives' homes, and at that time they talk to each other, so they see
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