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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year old child.Write a letter to the parents .In your letter -explain why would like the job -give details why you would be a suitable person to employ -say how you spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Parents. I saw
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 advert reporting a trip to Australia for Six months. I would like to try to experiment, I am curious and dynamic.
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coherence cohesion
Provide a clear introduction, body, and conclusion to enhance readability.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task with sufficient detail.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphs to separate different points for better clarity.
task achievement
The writer has clearly stated his interest in the job, which is a good start.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • caregiver
  • childcare experience
  • passion for children
  • responsibility
  • patience
  • commitment
  • cultural immersion
  • local environment
  • community engagement
  • flexibility
  • references
  • qualifications
  • volunteer work
  • educational background
  • suitable candidate
  • enthusiasm
  • positive impact
  • personal attributes
  • willingness
  • explore
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