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There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.

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No one can deny that There is an increasing trend around the world of married
couple
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couples
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 deciding not to have
children
. Is an important issue where it has both positive and negative aspects so in
this
 essay , l will shed light on the argumentative discussions concerning the main advantages and disadvantages . On one
hand
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 many people believe that One primary advantage of remaining childless for married
couples
 is that they can focus on their work.
This
 is because they have less responsibility and distractions in their lives compared to the
couples
 that have a child. Another advantage of
this
 is that they have more spare
time
. Looking after a child is a full-
time
 job for parents and
taking
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 most of their
time
,
while
 child-free
couples
 have lots of free
time
 after work.
For example
, many
couples
 stop going out late with their friends after having a child as they have to stay at home
for looking
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 after their
children
. On
other
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hand
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 there are
also
same
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some
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backsides the most significant is that
couples
 deciding not to have
children
 is that they can struggle to hang with their peers after most of them have
children
.
Anther
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 negative is that
couples
 deciding not to have
children
 feeling every
time
 boring ,
instead
 don’t have
deal
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and
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 care
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was
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 old . In
conclusion
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 it is fair that There is an increasing trend around the world of married
couple
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couples
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 deciding not to have
children
. Indicates more advances than disadvantages and
clear
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 from what has been previously discussed.
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task response
Mentioning specific advantages, like focusing on work and having more spare time, adds strength to your argument.
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Providing real-life examples, such as couples stopping social activities due to childcare responsibilities, enhances your points.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • childfree
  • personal freedom
  • financial stress
  • raising children
  • nurturing the relationship
  • societal pressure
  • stigma
  • support network
  • companionship
  • legacy
  • regret
  • intimate bond
  • norm
  • invest in experiences
  • close-knit
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