The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliance and amount of time spent doing houswork in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main featurs and make comparison where relevant

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliance and amount of time spent doing houswork in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main featurs and make comparison where relevant
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This
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chart illustrates the changes in percentages of
families
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using electrical tools and the amount of time taken to do the housework in a particular country
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between 1920 and 2019. Briefly, we can see significantly that, the more households owned electrical appliances the less time
needed
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to do the housework each week.
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,
families
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bought refrigerators and vacuum cleaners in increasing trend
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washing machines faced a slow increase. Astonishingly, no
families
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owned a refrigerator in 1920 as there was 0% in 1920 but dramatically raised to 90% in 40 years and
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reached 100% between 1980 and 2019.
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, 30% of
families
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owned vacuum cleaners in 1920 and saw
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gradual increase over the years until it reached 100% in 2000. Apparently, washing machines were the highest number
electrical
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appliances in 1920 but the increase was not so smooth and were the lowest percentage of ownership in 2019 with only 75% when compared to the other two appliances.
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,
families
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used to do housework for 50 hours per week in 1920 and there was about 30 hours drop in 1960 and a more gradual decrease between 1960 and 2019 when it
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reached 10 hours per week.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliance
  • household
  • refrigerator
  • vacuum cleaner
  • washing machine
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • time spent
  • household chores
  • daily routines
  • technological advancement
  • affordable
  • efficient
  • lifestyle
  • gender roles
  • societal expectations
  • impact
  • availability
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