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The table shows the results of a survey of people's perception of celebrity news coverage. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the results of a survey of people's perception of celebrity news coverage. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Given is a table comparing the findings of people's perception of celebrity
news
coverage
.
Overall
, the results suggest that most people are in favour of the idea that too much
news
coverage
 is received by celebrities and TVs provide more latest information. It is obvious that a vast majority of people think celebrities receive too much
news
coverage
while
 a small proportion
believe
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believes
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 there is too little
coverage
 on
news
 and seven interest said there was
right
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the right
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 amount. In accordance
of
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with
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 who is responsible for the amount, more than half voted for
news
 organisations and 34% for the public. Both of them were felt responsible by roughly one in ten respondents. When asked to identify who is in charge of providing most of the
coverage
, exactly 60 % choose
Tv
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TV
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news
.
Correct article usage
Percentage
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The percentage
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Percentage
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of
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apply
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15 % are of the view of online
news
while
this
percent
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per cent
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 is triple for other factors
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words news, coverage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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