the graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that openen in one country between 2011-2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparasis where relevant

the graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that openen in one country between 2011-2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparasis where relevant
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The line graph illustrates
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the opening and closing of shops in a country between the years of 2011 and 2018. From viewing
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graph, we are able to see some data on shops.
Firstly
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,
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the year
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2011, was the highest recorded amount of stores opening in the country. Closures
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were
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close to the amount of openings, with a difference of only around 2000 between the two.
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, in 2012, the release of new stores took a drop,
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shutting down barely changed.
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, releases of establishments slowly increased between the years of 2013 to 2014.
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, the shutting down of establishments seemed to pause, with less than 1000 stopping business for good in the year
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2015.
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,
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graph is able to show us how stores
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consistent and always fluctuating. There
isnt
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isn't
a guarantee on if they will remain open for years or if they will close business in less than 2.
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