The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.
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The bar chart provides data about people
purchase
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games software,CDs and
DVD
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DVDs
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or
video
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videos
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all over the world
form
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from
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2000 to 2003. Units are measured in
billions
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.
Overall
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,CDs
were
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represented the highest
sales
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among all the mentioned years.
By contrast
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, games software
were
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accounted for the lowest
sales
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valumn
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volume
over four years. It is obvious that CDs
was
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were
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one of the most popular consumption and
keep
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kept
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the highest
sales
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figure from 2000 to 2003,even though it was slightly decreased from 35
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billions
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billion
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in 2000 to 32
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billions
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billion
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in 2003.
However
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,DVD/
Vedio
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Video
was sharply increased in those four years with 17billions,21billions,26billions and 31billions respectively. It achieved only
slight
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gap
compare
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to DCs. In terms of games software,it noticeably increased
beween
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between
2000 to 2003 from 11
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billions
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billion
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to 16
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billions
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billion
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.
Nevertheless
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, it stayed
the
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at the
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same
sales
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amount in 2003 stood at 16
biilions
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billion
billions
, and still
keep
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kept
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the lowest
sales
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catogories
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categories
compare
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compared
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to CDs and DVD/Video.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billions, sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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