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The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men amd women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men amd women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart describes information about post-school qualifications in Australia between males and females on 5 different levels in 1999. The most significant facts to emerge from the chart are that the Undergraduate
Diploma
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 levels were dominated by
women
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while
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men
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 had the highest number of skill Vocational
Diploma
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. Another interesting point is that Bachelor's Degree had the lowest range in both genders. Looking at the details, the percentage of
women
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 post-school was not as many as
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men
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male
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 graduates which the number of
men
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 on Professional
Diploma
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 achieved 90% that compared to
women
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 on
same
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 levels obtained just 10%.
Following
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this
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, The Postgraduate
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 and Masters Degree
also
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 were led by
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males
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 70% and 60% respectively alumnus
whereas
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women
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 gained just 30% and 40% each in 1999.
On the other hand
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, the number of female Undergraduate
Diploma
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 possessed twice times
than
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that
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men
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of men
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 Undergraduate
Diploma
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. Meanwhile, the Bachelor's Degree graduates in both genders had almost similar numbers at 45% and 50% respectively.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words diploma, women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • levels
  • post-school qualifications
  • proportion
  • men
  • women
  • held
  • clear gender disparity
  • Certificate I
  • Certificate II
  • Certificate III
  • Certificate IV
  • Diploma or Higher
  • highest proportion
  • decreases
  • overall
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