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The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given table illustrates
production
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the production
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 of renewable
energy
 through five sources in four
years
 between 2009-2012.
Overall
, its
production
 inclined in these
years
 where
Hydraulic
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the Hydraulic
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energy
 source produced
maximum
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the maximum
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 amount of
energy
 consistently,
while
 solar
energy
 and geothermal produced the least amount of renewable
energy
 throughout all four
years
.
To begin
 with,
hydraulic
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hydraulics
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 produced over 3000
trillion
 watt
energyand
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energy and
 increased along as the
years
 passed reaching the peak level of
energy
production
 of 3663.4
trillion
 watt.
Similarly
, wind and biomass showed
the
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a
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 similar inclination reaching a level of 534
trillion
 and 326.2
trillion
 respectively in 2012 In
contract
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contrast
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, geothermal and solar
energy
 sources produced the least amount of
energy
, where
geo thermal
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geothermal
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 consistently remained plataue
while
 solar
production
 rose to second
last
 in
energy
production
 with 104.5
trillion
watt
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watts
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 leaving geothermal at
last
 at only 70.4
trillion
 in 2012.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words production, energy, years, trillion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Renewable sources
  • Electricity production
  • Significant growth/decline
  • Yearly basis
  • Specific figures
  • Stagnated
  • Regional differences
  • Anomalies
  • Unexpected trends
  • Implications
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