Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The two maps illustrate the developments made to a local

library

over 20 years ago and what it represents today.

Overall

, the

library

developed from only an educational space to a more entertaining area with an events area, a cafe, and self-service machines. twenty years ago, the

library

had tables and chairs in the middle just in front of the entrance.Today these have been removed, and it is now an open space. The CDs, videos,and

acomputer

Correct your spelling

a computer

computer

room

on the top left were renovated and expanded into a storytelling events area, with sofas and children's fiction books. To the left of the

room

, the children's

room

was replaced with a lecture

room

However

, the middle section towards the east of the

library

where the adult's non-fiction books were, is now replaced with fiction books and the addition of self-service machines

have

Correct subject-verb agreement

has

show examples

been installed. there has

also

been a relocation of the information desk to the same areas and was redesigned into a cafe towards the right side of the entrance.

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Grammar and Mechanics

Ensure consistent use of capitalization throughout the essay. For instance, 'twenty years ago' should be 'Twenty years ago' and 'there' should be 'There'.

Essay Structure

Conclude the essay with a brief summary or concluding statement to give it a complete structure.

Content Development

Include more specific details and examples to enhance clarity and comprehension. For example, explicate how the changes have impacted the functionality of the library.

Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure a smooth transition between sentences and paragraphs to improve the logical flow of ideas.

Task Response

The essay demonstrates a good understanding of the task and effectively highlights the changes made to the library over the years.

Content Development

The main points are well-supported with specific details on the transformations within the library.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

169 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Fully explain your ideas

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process the picture below shows the process of growing and making products using pineapple

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