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Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The two maps illustrate the developments made to a local
library
 over 20 years ago and what it represents today.
Overall
, the
library
 developed from only an educational space to a more entertaining area with an events area, a cafe, and self-service machines. twenty years ago, the
library
 had tables and chairs in the middle just in front of the entrance.Today these have been removed, and it is now an open space. The CDs, videos,and
acomputer
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a computer
computer
room
 on the top left were renovated and expanded into a storytelling events area, with sofas and children's fiction books. To the left of the
room
, the children's
room
 was replaced with a lecture
room
.
However
, the middle section towards the east of the
library
 where the adult's non-fiction books were, is now replaced with fiction books and the addition of self-service machines
have
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has
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 been installed. there has
also
 been a relocation of the information desk to the same areas and was redesigned into a cafe towards the right side of the entrance.
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Grammar and Mechanics
Ensure consistent use of capitalization throughout the essay. For instance, 'twenty years ago' should be 'Twenty years ago' and 'there' should be 'There'.
Essay Structure
Conclude the essay with a brief summary or concluding statement to give it a complete structure.
Content Development
Include more specific details and examples to enhance clarity and comprehension. For example, explicate how the changes have impacted the functionality of the library.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure a smooth transition between sentences and paragraphs to improve the logical flow of ideas.
Task Response
The essay demonstrates a good understanding of the task and effectively highlights the changes made to the library over the years.
Content Development
The main points are well-supported with specific details on the transformations within the library.

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