The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how a biofuel called ethanol is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given figure illustrates the
production
of biofuel which is the making process of
ethanol
.
Overall
, it is a cycle process from the
production
of energy to the
production
of carbon dioxide. At the beginning of the whole procession, the growth of plants and trees provides energy from sunlight and carbon dioxide. It will enter the harvesting procession when the plants and trees have grown in the mutual stage.
Next,
it enters the machine level to arrange the result of harvesting. In
this
stage, cellulose is taken from the harvesting.
Also
, it will take out the sugars in the processing.
Finally
, microbes added
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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from sugars and they become
ethanol
. After making the
ethanol
, it provides different transportation,
such
as cars or
aeroplane
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aeroplanes
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. The
production
of
ethanol
increases transportation and economic development. After the transportation, it put out the carbon dioxide into the air and the rain. It adds the plants and trees again.
Finally
, it is a circular procession of the
production
of
ethanol
, which is called biofuel.
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