As a part of their education, many students work at a company for a short period of time without a salary. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to this?

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of
university
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the university
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goes
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to
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the company
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company
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companies
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for
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a part-time
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job
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jobs
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without salary,
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supported by the education system and
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universities
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essay will discuss both
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and the drawbacks of
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concept. One of the primary
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of
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work
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working
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at a company is
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the
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experience, it
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as
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a strong base
of
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the career,
it
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and it
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improves
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a student's
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capability, character and quality of
work
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.
moreover
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, it
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helps to get
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high-paying
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job
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jobs
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and designated
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in the industries.
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, it enhances more information regarding
work
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and firm.
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, my cousin got
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the high-paid
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job
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after
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completion
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of degree, the reason is, that he mentioned his part-time
work
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experience in his resume, which
benifits
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benefits
a lot as a fresher employee.
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,
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job
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a job
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without
salary
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a salary
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also
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has its drawbacks. One significant disadvantage is the lack of concentration in study, which can
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as
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low grades in
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the final
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examina
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examine
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, it at all
students
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can balance their education and
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, it
do
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note creat
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not create
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any
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at all.
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, many
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student
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students
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could
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not able to clear
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last
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year
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examination,
that mean
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,
students
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cannot participate
for
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in
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placements at university and have to apply for re-examination,
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,
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while
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apply
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a
job
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without money can develop
students
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fundamentally and
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build up
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confidence and dedication to
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work
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in future. Meanwhile, it
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affects the merits of
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students
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which is
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very important for
further
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work
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. It is essential to address these issues to ensure that the benefits of
internship
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internships
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can be fully realized by all
students
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