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The line graph below shows the average temperatures of three Afrecan cities through the year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average temperatures of three Afrecan cities through the year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph depicts the weather conditions during a
year
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 broken down by month within three African towns
such
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 as
Mombasa
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, Kenya;
Cairo
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, Egypt and Cape Town, South Africa.
Firstly
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, it is noticeable that the three
cities
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 showed some fluctuation during these 12 months.
Cairo
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 in Egypt was the one that had the highest and lowest temperature.
Moreover
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,
Mombasa
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 remained above 75
Fahrenheit
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 degree
while
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 Cape Town kept its weather below 70
Fahrenheit
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 degree.
Cairo
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 started the
year
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 with the lowest climate at 55
Fahrenheit
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 degree, after seven months reached a peak at 82
degrees
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, and
then
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 significantly dropped
at the end
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 of the
year
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 with a temperature of 57
degrees
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.
Conversely
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, Cape Town and
Mombasa
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, both
cities
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 began January with 70 and 80
Fahrenheit
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degrees
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, respectively,
then
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 at the middle of the
year
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, a downward trend was seen where
Cairo
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 fell to 55
degrees
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 whilst
Mombasa
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 had a decrease of 75
degrees
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.
At the end
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 of December, both
cities
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 had an increase where they reached the same temperature as January.
To sum up
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, these three African
cities
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 located in Egypt, Kenya, and South Africa showed slight fluctuation during the
year
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 given.
However
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,
Cairo
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 had the highest and lowest weather
while
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 the other two towns demonstrated more stable climate conditions.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, mombasa, cairo, cities, fahrenheit, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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