You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six- year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter •explain why you would like the job. •give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ. •say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

After reading your advertisement I understand it could be a wonderful experience for me to come to your country and live with your family. I will have
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to know new people, to know a different culture, to learn new traditions and to have new points of view. I will learn how to share a house with somebody I've never met before. I will have the pleasure of taking care of your little child. It will be a way to grow as
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being without putting me
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first. I would keep as
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goal the happiness and serenity of your child. I will try to find
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way to make him feel comfortable and loved
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any occasion I should face. When I
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have free time I wish I could visit museums,
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and historical
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building
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. I hope I will have
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to get in touch with the natives , like
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I will be able to appreciate their culture and way of living. I hope it will be a good experience for both me and you. I wish you the best, Sara
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph centers on a single idea to increase clarity.
task achievement
Provide more specific details about your qualifications and experiences with children to strengthen your task response.
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Make sure to double-check for minor grammatical errors to improve overall polish.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are polite and appropriate for the context.
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The tone of the letter is suitable for a job application context, showing enthusiasm and respect.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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