The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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Personally, I buy so much online especially clothes because for me is so much easier and because I can’t find something I like in physical

stores

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online

stores

give me so

much

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options. I know that

this

type of shopping is not eco-friendly but I hope that with time the shipment method becoming more easy and

with

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less impactful for the earth. But I don’t think physical

stores

one day will be closed with the online shopping growing.

This

because

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especially for clothes, we need to try on clothes, and

this

happens immediately in physical

stores

without having to

wait

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the

packs

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delivery and without

spent

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any money. Or if we need something

last

minute the physical

stores

are the only option. So, for these

reasons

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I don’t think that

the

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online

stores

will be the only way to buy something. Of course, they must evolve their ideas of

stores

with online

website

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and delivery but people will always need physical

stores

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Summary
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Prediction or recommendation

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

163 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

e-commerce
brick-and-mortar
physical stores
online retailers
retail apocalypse
digital economy
consumer behavior
sustainability
commercial landscape
high-street
consumer trends
augmented reality
showrooms
carbon footprint

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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

2) Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People should only concentrate on a single skill for life because it is the best way to succeed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some cities, public parks and open spaces are changed into gardens where local residents can grow their own food and vegetables. Do you think the benefits outweigh disadvantages?

In some countries there are more young people choosing to enrol in work-based training instead of attending university. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.