The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Personally, I buy so much online especially clothes because for me is so much easier and because I can’t find something I like in physical
stores
so
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online
stores
give me so
much
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options. I know that
this
type of shopping is not eco-friendly but I hope that with time the shipment method becoming more easy and
with
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less impactful for the earth. But I don’t think physical
stores
one day will be closed with the online shopping growing.
This
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especially for clothes, we need to try on clothes, and
this
happens immediately in physical
stores
without having to
wait
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the
packs
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delivery and without
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any money. Or if we need something
last
minute the physical
stores
are the only option. So, for these
reasons
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I don’t think that
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online
stores
will be the only way to buy something. Of course, they must evolve their ideas of
stores
with online
website
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and delivery but people will always need physical
stores
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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