The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities

Personally, I buy so much online especially clothes because for me is so much easier and because I can’t find something I like in physical

stores

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online

stores

give me so

much

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options. I know that

this

type of shopping is not eco-friendly but I hope that with time the shipment method becoming more easy and

with

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less impactful for the earth. But I don’t think physical

stores

one day will be closed with the online shopping growing.

This

because

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especially for clothes, we need to try on clothes, and

this

happens immediately in physical

stores

without having to

wait

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the

packs

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delivery and without

spent

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any money. Or if we need something

last

minute the physical

stores

are the only option. So, for these

reasons

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I don’t think that

the

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online

stores

will be the only way to buy something. Of course, they must evolve their ideas of

stores

with online

website

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and delivery but people will always need physical

stores

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Q. Some people think its better to have friends that have same opinion, while others belive it is good having friends who sometimes have different opinion. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays many ecosystems in the world are experiencing problems because large predators are going extinct. Why is this a bad thing? What solution can governments implement to solve this problem?

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+