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The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph depicts and compares with colour-coded bars how many people visited the three museums located in London each year in the 5-year period between 2007 and 2012. Regarding the chart,
it is clear that
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 the general trend of an increase in the number of
visitors
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 to the National Gallery
Museum
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, which plateaued for 1 year and rose to a peak of just more than 15
million
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.
Whereas
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, the number of those who visited the British
Museum
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 tailed off until 2009, which had 12 and a half
million
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visitors
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 in 2007 but had gained merely 2
million
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 more
visitors
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.
Also
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, the Victoria and Albert
Museum
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, which had almost 14
million
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visitors
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, fluctuated,
however
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 ended up getting fewer
visitors
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 with approximately 10
million
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at the end
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 of the given period.
Overall
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, British and National Gallery Museums became more popular over the course,
while
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 the Victoria and Albert
Museum
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 was losing its prestige, popularity and
visitors
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, museum, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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