The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the three major causes - industry,
transportation
and electricity - of gas emissions of four countries, namely China, America, Japan and Australia, in the year 2012, measured in parts per million (
PPM
).
Overall
,
it is clear that
the industrial factor was the major cause of poor
air
quality
in China and Japan,
while
pollutants from
transportation
and electricity generation were the major sources in America and Australia.
According to
the data, the Chinese and the Japanese experience bad
air
quality
which is mainly caused by their countries' factory activities, contributed by 80
PPM
and around 41
PPM
, respectively. The other causes of
air
pollution in the two Asian countries,
such
as emissions from
transportation
and electric tool usage, contributed
by
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70
PPM
and approximately 59
PPM
in China and 30
PPM
and around 15
PPM
in Japan.
On the other hand
, most of the factors behind the decreasing
quality
of
air
in America
was
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due to
their people's mobilization using
transportation
, which occurred to emit about 59
PPM
of
air
pollutants
as
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their highest level,
while
the greenhouse gases generated from industrial and electrical usage were each about half of that amount.
Furthermore
, Australia is the country with the best
air
quality
for its people, compared with the other nations provided in the figure, where all
the
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three major factors of
air
pollutants only contributed by around 20
PPM
each.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words transportation, ppm, air, quality with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollution levels
  • sources of pollution
  • industrial pollution
  • transportation-related pollution
  • household pollution
  • highest levels
  • lowest levels
  • notable changes
  • anomalies
  • comparisons
  • summarise
  • highlight
  • analyze
  • chart
  • data
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