The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the three major causes - industry,
transportation
and electricity - of gas emissions of four countries, namely China, America, Japan and Australia, in the year 2012, measured in parts per million (PPM
). Overall
, it is clear that
the industrial factor was the major cause of poor air
quality
in China and Japan, while
pollutants from transportation
and electricity generation were the major sources in America and Australia.
According to
the data, the Chinese and the Japanese experience bad air
quality
which is mainly caused by their countries' factory activities, contributed by 80 PPM
and around 41 PPM
, respectively. The other causes of air
pollution in the two Asian countries, such
as emissions from transportation
and electric tool usage, contributed by
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PPM
and approximately 59 PPM
in China and 30 PPM
and around 15 PPM
in Japan.
On the other hand
, most of the factors behind the decreasing quality
of air
in America was
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were
due to
their people's mobilization using transportation
, which occurred to emit about 59 PPM
of air
pollutants as
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while
the greenhouse gases generated from industrial and electrical usage were each about half of that amount. Furthermore
, Australia is the country with the best air
quality
for its people, compared with the other nations provided in the figure, where all the
three major factors of Correct article usage
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air
pollutants only contributed by around 20 PPM
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