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a doubt, there are several reasons behind active ecotourism and cultural contact which
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environment
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generations, which provides a good
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enforcement
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cultural contact people can easily share and exchange their different customs,
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which has a
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positive
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society like boosting the domestic
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coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. Include these to improve structure and make your writing more cohesive.
task achievement
Ensure that you support your main points with relevant and specific examples. This will make your arguments stronger and more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Work on your spelling and grammar. For example, 'envoremet' should be 'environment', 'resopnisbe' should be 'responsible', 'belives' should be 'beliefs', and 'posetive' should be 'positive'.
task achievement
Your essay presents a couple of interesting points about ecotourism and cultural contact.
task achievement
Your ideas are generally clear and they address the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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