The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data. You should write at least 150 words.

The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

You should write at least 150 words.
These two pie charts demonstrate the
comperison
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comparison
of
nutrition
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nutritional
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components of two meals:
macaroni
and medium baked
potato
. At
the
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first
blush
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blush,
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it
seem
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that there is a basic difference
on
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in
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it's
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consistency.
Firstly
,
percentage
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the percentage
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of
carbohydrate
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carbohydrates
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. It's an
increase
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content of them in the
macaroni
meal - 52% , and 35% in the
potato
meal. Saturated fat takes
the
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second
place
in pasta with 21%, and
the
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fourth
place
in
potato
with only 10%. The third
place
in
macaroni
meal
devides
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divides
divided
between protein and glucose, both of them with 11%, and in
potato
they take second and third
place
with 25% and 15%
rerespectively
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respectively
.
Furthermore
, there are more no-name nutrients in
the
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both meals - 5% in pasta, and 15% in
medium
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a medium
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baked
potato
. In conclusion, we can see from these pie graphs, that the
macaroni
dinner is less healthy than the medium baked
potato
meal.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words macaroni, potato, place with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutritional consistency
  • carbohydrates
  • proteins
  • fats
  • vitamins
  • minerals
  • fiber
  • proportion
  • component
  • pie graph
  • comparison
  • significant
  • balance
  • healthy
  • dietary choices
  • implications
  • absent
  • presence
  • macro-nutrients
  • micro-nutrients
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