Air transport is increasingly use to exported fruits and vegetables to countries where they can not be grown or out of seasons . What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
Although
aeroplanes are very fast when flying and it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
delivers
fresh Correct subject-verb agreement
deliver
fruits
, on the other hand
, it is also
very expensive.Therefore
, it is important to transport
vegetables
as well as
fruits
to other countries or even abroad, but it demands more money. Thus
, I am going urge
both drawbacks and benefits of using flights as a transportation in the forthcoming essay.
Fix the infinitive
to urge
Initially
, mangoes, apples as well as
cabbages will arrive it's
destination, whilst they are still fresh.Correct your spelling
at's
This
can clearly show the quickerness
of a plane and Correct your spelling
quickness
also
Add an article
the customer
a customer
customer
will buy current products when they are doing shopping.A very good example to illustrate that could be my native country Fix the agreement mistake
customers
South
Africa, in South Africa, farmers Add the comma(s)
, South
they
grow sweet Correct pronoun usage
apply
mango
and export Fix the agreement mistake
mangoes
it
to Poland using cargo flights, Correct pronoun usage
them
hence
, Poland will usually receive freshly
Change the adverb
fresh
fruits
all the time.This
is
clearly Verb problem
apply
shown
that air Wrong verb form
shows
transport
is mostly fast and convenient.
On the other side, transporting vegetables
using airlines is more and more expensive, many
companies cannot cover all the costs, Correct word choice
and many
while
they are delivering such
raw materials to
abroad.Change preposition
apply
For
instance
a long ago in the 19th century, Zimbabwe tried to Add a comma
instance,
transport
cabbages and covo to the UK and after some
few years it Correct determiner usage
a
become
bankrupt Wrong verb form
became
due to
the miscalcutions
of the capital needed compared to Correct your spelling
miscalculations
miscalculation
expense
and the profit outcome.Add an article
the expense
Moreover
, from that time until now Zimbabwe is nolonger
deliver Correct your spelling
no longer
vegetables
abroad using a flight.This
, also
prove
that exporting cabbages using aeroplanes Correct subject-verb agreement
proves
it's
unprofitable.
Verb problem
is
To conclude
, flights are now trending in terms of exporting fresh products such
as fruits
and vegetables
to other states, however
, using that type of transport
is expensive but it is
Unnecessary verb
apply
also
deliver
goods as freshly as it can.Correct subject-verb agreement
delivers
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task achievement
Try to provide more balanced arguments by exploring both advantages and disadvantages equally. This will give a more rounded perspective on the topic.
coherence cohesion
Work on using transitional words and phrases more effectively to improve the logical flow between points and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repeating ideas. For instance, you mentioned the expensiveness of air transport multiple times without adding new information.
task achievement
Good use of specific examples such as the South African mangoes and Zimbabwean cabbages to support your points.
task achievement
You presented both advantages and disadvantages of using air transport for exporting fruits and vegetables, showing an understanding of the topic.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...