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Some people believe that the internet has brought people closer together by making the world smaller. Others disagree, claiming that the internet has made people and communities more isolated because they no longer need to leave home and interact with others. Discuss both views. (No opinion)

#people #internet #world #communities #home
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Some claim that with the help of
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the internet
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internet
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internet,
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people
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 are becoming
more
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closer to
one
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 another regardless of the distance
among
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 them,
while
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others
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 believe
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internet
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the internet
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 has decreased the need
for leaving
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 home and socialize with
others
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. On the
one
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 hand, it is argued that
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internet
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the internet
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 has made the concept of distance disappear among
people
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 since individuals can contact
with
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one
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 another regardless of their location. Thanks to
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 invention
people
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 have already become more reachable. It provides its users with
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 facility that enables them to communicate constantly and share their opinions and experiences easily without any difficulties. Obviously,
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 tendency
help
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helps
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people
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 to get closer and become more social by nature.
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, there are numerous applications available
such
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 as Skype, Zoom, Microsoft Teams, and so on. that are quite popular online platforms which connect
people
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 and help them to get in touch with
one
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 another all the time.
On the other hand
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,
others
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 claim that the
internet
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 has mainly detrimental effects on
people
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 utilizing it on a daily basis. Considering
people
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 spend
significant
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a significant
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 proportion of their
times
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time
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 on various engrossing digital platforms and streaming apps, they do not feel any necessity to be more with their family members or friends.
Due to
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 the addictive nature of
the
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online websites, active users isolate themselves from other individuals, which
lead
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leads
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people
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 to
evading
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others
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 and spend all their
times
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time
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to delve
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 deep into those
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internet connected
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 devices.
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,
according to
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the
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recent statistics,
peope
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people
 squander almost 7 or 8 hours of their days by solely scrolling up and down through their screens aimlessly.
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 means they have no intention or encouragement to get into contact with any of their friends which
make
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 them more closed.
To conclude
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,
according to
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 the views of
public
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the public
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, the
internet
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 has both positive and negative impacts on human relationships.
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 providing
people
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 with multiple facilities to reach out
any
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to any
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 person, it
also
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make
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people
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to
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appreciate their
solitary
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solitude
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 and not
to
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apply
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try to make any connections.
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grammar
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language
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examples
Provide more detailed examples for your points to make your argument stronger and more convincing.
balance
You've done a good job presenting both views in a balanced manner and without showing bias.
structure
Your essay is well-structured with a clear introduction and conclusion.
examples
The usage of specific applications (Skype, Zoom, etc.) as examples effectively supports your point about connectivity facilitated by the internet.

Your opinion

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