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The climograph below shows average monthly temperatures and rainfall in the city of Kolkata. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph gives information about the monthly average
rainfall
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 in the
city
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 of
Kolkata
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while
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 the line graph illustrates the average
temperature
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 every month of the same
city
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.
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, it can be seen that
Kolkata
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 experiences varying
amount
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amounts
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 of
rainfall
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 in a span of 12
months
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whereas
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, its heat
temperature
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 almost remains constant
all
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apply
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throughout the period. With regard to monthly precipitation,
Kolkata
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 experiences
very
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a very
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 small amount of rain in
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months
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the months
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 of January to April averaging from about 10mm to around 50mm.
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, In May, the
city
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 has more
rainfall
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 with its figures increasing to 100mm and continues to rise hitting a high of 250 in June. Interestingly, June and July's precipitation are almost the same standing at approximately 330mm.
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this
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,
Kolkata
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's
rainfall
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 drops to below 300 in September and continually decreases to a low of 5mm in December which is almost the same volume of rain the
city
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 has
in
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 the beginning of the year. Turning to the monthly
temperature
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,
Kolkata
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's heat index starts at around 20 degrees Celsius.
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 there is a slight increase in its
temperature
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 after 4
months
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,
this
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 does not continue to rise as it remains constant the following
months
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 to around 30 degrees Celsius from May to September. It is interesting to note that its average
temperature
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 goes back to 20 degrees by the end of the year.

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Introduction/Conclusion
Consider adding a brief conclusion to summarise your findings. This helps to emphasize the main points you have discussed.
Coherence/Cohesion
Ensure that the comparison between temperature and rainfall is explicitly stated in a single sentence for better clarity and coherence.
Task Response
When describing data, use precise language to indicate trends and specific figures to support your points. For example, state exact temperature values for the months mentioned.
Task Achievement
The essay clearly addresses both temperature and rainfall, showcasing a thorough understanding of the data.
Coherence/Cohesion
The use of transitional phrases such as 'With regard to' and 'Turning to' enhances the flow of the essay, making it easy to follow.
Language Use
The language is clear and mostly accurate, with only minor errors that do not impede understanding.

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