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The climograph below shows average monthly temperatures and rainfall in the city of Kolkata. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph gives information about the monthly average
rainfall
 in the
city
 of
Kolkata
while
 the line graph illustrates the average
temperature
 every month of the same
city
.
Overall
, it can be seen that
Kolkata
 experiences varying
amount
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amounts
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 of
rainfall
 in a span of 12
months
whereas
, its heat
temperature
 almost remains constant
all
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apply
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throughout the period. With regard to monthly precipitation,
Kolkata
 experiences
very
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 small amount of rain in
months
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the months
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 of January to April averaging from about 10mm to around 50mm.
However
, In May, the
city
 has more
rainfall
 with its figures increasing to 100mm and continues to rise hitting a high of 250 in June. Interestingly, June and July's precipitation are almost the same standing at approximately 330mm.
After
this
,
Kolkata
's
rainfall
 drops to below 300 in September and continually decreases to a low of 5mm in December which is almost the same volume of rain the
city
 has
in
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 the beginning of the year. Turning to the monthly
temperature
,
Kolkata
's heat index starts at around 20 degrees Celsius.
Although
 there is a slight increase in its
temperature
 after 4
months
,
this
 does not continue to rise as it remains constant the following
months
 to around 30 degrees Celsius from May to September. It is interesting to note that its average
temperature
 goes back to 20 degrees by the end of the year.
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Introduction/Conclusion
Consider adding a brief conclusion to summarise your findings. This helps to emphasize the main points you have discussed.
Coherence/Cohesion
Ensure that the comparison between temperature and rainfall is explicitly stated in a single sentence for better clarity and coherence.
Task Response
When describing data, use precise language to indicate trends and specific figures to support your points. For example, state exact temperature values for the months mentioned.
Task Achievement
The essay clearly addresses both temperature and rainfall, showcasing a thorough understanding of the data.
Coherence/Cohesion
The use of transitional phrases such as 'With regard to' and 'Turning to' enhances the flow of the essay, making it easy to follow.
Language Use
The language is clear and mostly accurate, with only minor errors that do not impede understanding.

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