Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays, celebrity coverage on social media is said to have
harmful
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influence on
children
. I
partyly
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partly
partially
agree with the point of view. In
this
essay, I would argue that
news
about famous
people
can have both negative and positive
consequence
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on
children
's perceptions. On the one hand,
children
can be negatively affected when being exposed too much to
news
about famous
people
.It is because of the fact that
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coverage of famous
people
is always abundant and available on the Internet so
children
can easily encounter them when opening their phone or tablet. Dangerously,
this
news
is most scandals,
rumors
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and
sentational
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sensational
news
.
According to
scientific research, the young are not yet fully developed cognitively and mentally, so they tend to mimic what they see.
As a result
,
children
can get confused between fame and notoriety.
On the other hand
,
children
can
also
be positively influenced by online information about celebrities.Fame can convey positive messages. If there are many
people
who are famous thanks to
scandalas
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scandalous
scandals
, there are
also
people
who use their hard work and ability to become famous and use that fame to spread
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.Den Vau - a well-known inspirational Vietnamese singer and volunteer In conclusion, I partially agree that celebrity coverage of well-known
people
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youngsters negatively. I do believe there are both negative and positive that information about famous
people
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people
use the internet
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Ensure there is a clear thesis statement and more detailed explanations to fully cover both aspects of the argument.
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Develop more structured paragraphs with clear topic sentences and supporting details to improve logical flow.
coherence cohesion
Use transitional phrases to better connect ideas and make the arguments smoother.
task achievement
The essay covers both positive and negative aspects of celebrity media coverage, showing a balanced approach.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, giving the essay a complete structure.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Celebrity culture
  • Glamorization
  • Unrealistic expectations
  • Self-esteem
  • Scandals
  • Role models
  • Moral development
  • Mental health
  • Influence
  • Exposure
  • Social media platforms
  • Charity work
  • Inappropriate behavior
  • Perfection image
  • Negative impact
  • Inspire children
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