The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.
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given
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bar chart shows the data of the ratio which is the different 5 generations
donated
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that donated
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money to charity in the periods of 1990 and 2010 in England.
Overall
, adults gave money to charity that was higher than the youngsters.
In addition
, the 1990's
people
spent more than the 2010's
people
. In 1990,
people
aged 36 - 50 were the
important
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most important
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donation, which exceeds 40%. The percentage of citizens, aged 26 - 35, 51 - 65 and more than 65, was more than 30%, which was about 32%, 35% and almost 32%.
While
the number of young
people
, aged 18 - 25, was lower and touched approximately 18%. In 2010, the British residents aged 51 - 65 were the peak of 5 generations, which is close to 40%. The proportion of
people
, aged 36 - 50 and larger than 65, was the same and touched 35%.
Nonetheless
, the number of teenagers, aged 18 - 25 and 26 -35, were lower than 25%, which was nearly 6% and 24%. The main difference between the years, aged 18 - 25, is greater than 10%.
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