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The pie charts show the spending habits of people in the UK in 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The pie charts show the spending habits of people in the UK in 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
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The pie charts
depicts
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depict
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 the percentage of money
spending
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spent
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 on
life
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the life
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 needs of individuals in
UK
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the UK
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 in 1971 and 2001.
Overall
 The most expenditure takes
cars
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car
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 production and investments
on
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in
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 nourishment,
while
 over time needs for gadgets and paper books fluctuate
Firstly
 , in 1971 people mostly
tend
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tended
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 to
spent
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spend
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one half
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one-half
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 of their budget on food supplements and
one fifth
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one-fifth
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 of
salary
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their salary
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 on vehicles The Identical picture we see in 1971,
as well as
in
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apply
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nowadays the tangible share namely nearly 10-12
percent
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per cent
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 of family income was devoted to the petrol
Secondly
, after 30 years ,priorities of The
Uk
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UK
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 residents have changed dramatically since the expenses for food provision
has
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have
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 declined by three times and had only 14
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percent
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percents
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per cent
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In contrast
 with
past
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the past
a past
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 progressive
manufacturer
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manufacturers
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 of cars and computers caused
rise
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a rise
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 in expenditure,
hence
 ,
doubled
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doubling
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 spending on cars and significantly
increased
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increasing
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 demand
on
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for
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PC
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PCs
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 and laptops
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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