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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates. Write a report for a university or college lecturer describing the information. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates. Write a report for a university or college lecturer describing the information. You should write at least 150 words.
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The provided diagram illustrates the process by which
students
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 enter their universities after high school graduation.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the entry procedure involves numerous distinct steps, and the application process can result in three different outcomes before accepting admission. Looking at the picture in more detail,
to begin
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 with,
students
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 are required to obtain their degrees from their senior high school and complete relevant application forms which can be downloaded from the corresponding university websites. During the second stage, compiled documentation and filled application forms are delivered to Admin.
Subsequently
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, they have to face three consequences. The first outcome is that
students
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 are conferred with provisional acceptance after 2 weeks, which means more documentation should be submitted.
According to
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 the diagram, regarding the second consequence,
students
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 will be rejected from their desired college. Afterwards, they can choose to cancel their applications or alter their applications for alternative courses.
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, if
students
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 undergo acceptance competitions and enrollment after 2 weeks, they need to select subjects and register with the Dean.
Finally
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, they can successfully enter the universities they apply for.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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