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Summarise and compare the features from the chart that shows the average hours worked per day by married men and women in paid employment.

Summarise and compare the features from the chart that shows the average hours worked per day by married men and women in paid employment.
The bar chart compares the average time that married males and females work per day being paid and in a household at home.
Overall
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, it can be seen that wives tend to put more effort than husbands in total but only
due to
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 a greater amount of unpaid service done at home.
On the other hand
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, men spend slightly more time at a paid job
in contrast
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 to women. Husbands at the age of 24-44 show almost the same performance during carrying out their paid duties as those aged 45-64 (about 7
hours
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) which is marginally greater than wives in the age category of 24-44 and 45-64 (5,5 and 6
hours
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 per day respectively). As for unpaid chores at home, younger men spend only relatively more
hours
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 than those of age 45-64 (around 3 and 2,5
hours
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 in turn) which is half as much time as ladies do in the same conditions (nearly 5
hours
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 per day).

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