The table illustrates the projected costings during the five years in American dollars for three environmental strategies for stable forestry, whilst the pie chart presents the anticipated expenses distributed by four sectors in the first year.

The table illustrates the projected costings during the five years in American dollars for three environmental strategies for stable forestry, whilst the pie chart presents the anticipated expenses distributed by four sectors in the first year.
The table depicts the prediction of
money
in US dollars which will be used for the next five
years
for maintaining the forest. Yet, the pie chart shows the expenditures to spend
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4 different areas in
year
one.
It is clear that
in five
years
the amount of
money
which will be used for environmental recovery
decreases
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for West Africa and Central America. Contrastly,
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Asia prepares more
money
in
year
five. The data in the other chart shows that half of the
money
is
prepared
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for
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salaries. Costs
ranks
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second,
while
office and training employees come
last
at 10% each. From the table, West Africa allocates 10.5
million
dollars in the first
year
, the number
then
decreases by around a quarter the
year
after and drops to just 2,5
million
the next two
years
but it increases by a
million
at the end
of the projected
year
. Central America starts at 20
million
and it plunges by almost 50% in
year
two before dropping to 5
million
respectively for the next three consecutive
years
.
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Asia spends 30
million
at first. the amount drops by a third in the second
year
yet it doubles in
year
three and ends at 50
million
in the
last
two
years
. The pie chart
informs
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that in the first
year
, the major expense is
on
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salaries,
accounted
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at
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50%, followed by training which takes a third of the
money
allocated. Only 10% of the
money
will be used for not only training but
also
office.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, years, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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