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You live in a room in the college hostel which has severe problems. You would like to move into another room and need your hostel super's permission for that. Write a letter to the hostel super. In your letter, introduce yourself describe the problems explain what type of room you would prefer

#room #college #hostel #move #permission #type
Dear MS. Maha, I hope you are doing well, I am writing
to
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this
 letter to inform you that I have suffering some problems in my
room
. I am Sarah Almutairi who
live
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 in the Fourth building in the accommodation complex, with
a
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room
 number 2
at
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 the third floor. As you know, we had
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maintenance operations
last
 week for the electricity, so after that the light in my
room
 did not work for a day , I think there was something wrong.
This
 is an obstacle for me to study hard for my exams.
In addition
, the shower bath in my own
room
 has a problem
also
 I could not define it. So, May I
transferred
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 to another
room
 in the same building or another one? that has
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good conditions in order to study hard. Thank you for considering my situation. I look forward to your response as soon as possible. Best regards, Sarah Almutairi
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Grammar
Ensure all verb forms are correct. For example, use 'I have been suffering' instead of 'I have suffering.'
Content
Include more details about the type of room you would prefer. For instance, specify whether you need a quieter room or one with better facilities.
Tone
The letter is polite and maintains a formal tone throughout.
Structure
The structure of the letter is clear, with separate paragraphs for each main idea.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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