You live in a room in the college hostel which has severe problems. You would like to move into another room and need your hostel super's permission for that. Write a letter to the hostel super. In your letter, introduce yourself describe the problems explain what type of room you would prefer

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Dear MS. Maha, I hope you are doing well, I am writing

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letter to inform you that I have suffering some problems in my

room

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. I am Sarah Almutairi who

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in the Fourth building in the accommodation complex, with

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room

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number 2

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the third floor. As you know, we had

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maintenance operations

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week for the electricity, so after that the light in my

room

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did not work for a day , I think there was something wrong.

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is an obstacle for me to study hard for my exams.

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, the shower bath in my own

room

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has a problem

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I could not define it. So, May I

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to another

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in the same building or another one? that has

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good conditions in order to study hard. Thank you for considering my situation. I look forward to your response as soon as possible. Best regards, Sarah Almutairi

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Grammar

Ensure all verb forms are correct. For example, use 'I have been suffering' instead of 'I have suffering.'

Content

Include more details about the type of room you would prefer. For instance, specify whether you need a quieter room or one with better facilities.

Tone

The letter is polite and maintains a formal tone throughout.

Structure

The structure of the letter is clear, with separate paragraphs for each main idea.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

159 words

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