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in many countires nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over tha world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Customers, who come from different
place
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places
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, can buy multiple
meal
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meals
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 and snacks, which
produce
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are produced
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 in
the
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other countries, in a
supermarket
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 in the present. It brings the
pro
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pros
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 and
con
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cons
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 for the
nation
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 society and their
econimic
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economy
. In my opinion,
this
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 situation is a positive development rather than a negative
developent
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development
. In the following essay will
dissuss
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discuss
 the world issue. From the
quailties
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qualities
 of life
prespective
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perspective
, it is
advanteaged
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advantaged
advantage
advantages
 for the
citiziens
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citizens
, who focus on the type of
food
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. As we know some special
food
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 is
the
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yummy and
taste
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tastes
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 good but it is difficult to have if we do not visit other countries.
However
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, people can buy
food
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easy
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then
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 they can try to have it since they buy these in their local
supermarket
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. It is no denying that the
oppoents'
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opponent's
opponents
 idea, it impacts the travel
industy
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industry
, is true,
while
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 it is not the majority.
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, sushi is
famous
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food
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 from Japan and is sold in the
supermarket
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 everywhere.
Hence
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, it does not have a drawback that
influence
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influences
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 the travel
indusy
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industry
.
In addition
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,
poorers
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poor people
 may not have experience and
chance
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the chance
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 to go
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to other
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other place
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another place
other places
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 to taste
the
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apply
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international
food
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,
then
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 it
provide
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 the
oppertunity
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opportunity
 for them.
According to
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 the survey, almost 30% of Hong Kong residents
is
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are
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 under the
proverty
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poverty
 line, which is approximately $10000 each month. They
are
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find it
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 hard to go the other places, excluding
Mainland
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the Mainland
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, so
that
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they have no chance
for
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to
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 buy
food
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.
Although
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 they have
saving
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 every year, they may save a long time and visit
the
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apply
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close
place
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places
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such
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 as Asia
countires
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countries
.
Therefore
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, the situation in the
supermarket
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 is helpful for them today
becuase
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because
 they try different
food
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.
To conclude
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, it is
benefital
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beneficial
 for consumers to taste
food
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, which produces all over the world. Someone
aruges
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argues
argued
 that it develops a disadvantage but visitors do not consider it if they go to travel. I think the life
quailities
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qualities
is
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are
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 the most important for people.

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coherence
Focus on organizing your paragraphs more effectively. Each paragraph should represent one clear idea and flow smoothly to the next.
task
Work on providing more specific examples to support your arguments. This will strengthen your main points.
language
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. A few errors make your essay harder to read and understand.
structure
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your position and your conclusion summarizes your main points effectively.
task
Your essay addresses the topic and provides a clear opinion, which is great for task achievement.
support
You have provided some reasons and examples to support your opinion, which shows that you are trying to develop your arguments.
structure
It's good that you have both an introduction and a conclusion in your essay. This helps in giving structure to your writing.
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