The two pie charts give information on the propotion of males and females in employment in six general categories in 1992, they divided into manual and non-manual

The two pie charts give information on the propotion of males and females in employment in six general categories in 1992, they divided into manual and non-manual
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The present pie diagrams compare data about the percentage of men and women who worked in 6 different items in two divisions namely,
craft
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or similar, general labourers, other manuals, manage and professional, clerical or related, and other non-manual in 1992.
overall
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, most females like to work non-manually especially in clerical or related, yet males' preference was manual in
Craft
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or similar categories.
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the females' graph, non-manual was the best work which had Nearly three quarters, and in there clerical or related was the first one with 31%;
then
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manage and professional was roughly the same as other manuals by approximately 30
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cent. Later, other non-manual,
craft
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or similar, and general labourers respectively had small proportions. The males' chart shows manual less amount larger than non-manual;
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, men manage and professional by 36% was the first level. Later
craft
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or similar nearly the same as other manuals by 25 per cent;
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, clerical and related was absolutely the same as other non-manual by 6%;
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the
last
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one was general labourers.
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