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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, more and more
people
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 are facing problems caused by
lack
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 of recycling service in their
neighborhood
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. Societies believe that in order to solve
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 problem,
issuance
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 of
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 legal requirements is impactful for both social and environmental aspects.
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 essay will elaborate
the
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 crucial role of
government’s
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government
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 regulation in terms of enhancing the quality of
waste-recycling
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waste recycling
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, leading to an increase in public awareness
as well as
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 environmental benefit. One major advantage
from
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 the issuance of formal regulations related to recycling waste is the growth of awareness for managing
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wastes
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waste
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 within communities.
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 was
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 the presence of stricter regulations that may lead to punishments for non-compliance.
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,
people
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 tend to avoid legal fines by categorizing their garbage bins into degradable or biodegradable
wastes
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 more carefully.
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, there will be no
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 un-recycled plastics once the representatives do their regular checking.
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,
people
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 have more consciousness related to the importance of waste management in everyday lives.
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, the government's law enforcement
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wastes
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 creates positive impacts towards the area’s environmental aspects as well. Not only increasing the degree of environmental cleanliness
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 but
also
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 balancing the
ecosystems
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ecosystem's
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 biodiversity.
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,
reduction
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the reduction
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 of hazardous
wastes
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spilled
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 in
soil
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 might improve the nutrition levels contained beneath it, simulating trees to
grow
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 in order for birds to build their nest and lay their eggs. The increasing number of birds may benefit the plants in the surrounding
neighborhood
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 by eating maggots as their prey.
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, it will enhance the balance of ecosystems that
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 within that area. In conclusion,
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government regulations play a potential role in the growth of societies’ recycling activities by enhancing the public’s awareness and the environmental benefits that the public receives. By the end of the day, it is the willingness of the
people
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 themselves to manage their waste and the benefits they might attain will become the main factors that drive communities to do recycling on their own.

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Your essay is well-organized and presents a clear argument. However, adding more specific examples would strengthen your points and provide clearer evidence to support your claims.
coherence cohesion
Ensure all paragraphs have a clear main idea and supporting details. This will help in making the logical flow even more apparent. Additionally, varying sentence structures can enhance your writing, making it more engaging.
introduction conclusion present
You have provided a clear introduction and conclusion which frame your essay well.
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Your opinion

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