The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
So if we see from 1970 to 2040 predictions the percentage only
increase
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so the main reason for
this
happening is with
time
it only gets worse for the people because the services that are in the city are not provided in the countries so with
time
the people will move out So if we are talking about the
thing
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the city has and the countries haven't is better living better Schools better jobs better places to go And
also
one of the reasons is the services it not always their sometimes the light goes off
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with what
withwhat
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for
no
reasons
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and that's what makes the population in the countries move out and leave the town to move to the city as we can see in Malaysia how percentage goes up in no
time
also
Indonesia from 2000 to 2020 how it went up very fast whit no
time
and that's why
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "goes up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 3 times.

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