Travelling in a group with a tour guide is the best way to travel. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
There is no doubt that these days everyone thinks that
the
travelling to any country Correct article usage
apply
became
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has become
more
easier. The question is, is travelling with a Change the word
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tour
guide
is
the best way to Unnecessary verb
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travel
? In this
essay .I am going to discuss my view and draw my personal connection.
In terms of advantage, travelling with a tour
guide
it may be a good idea for old people
. The main reason to support this
claim is that when you travel
to a new country you don't know anything there you will a
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have a
tour
guide
to take to
the best places in Correct pronoun usage
you to
this
country. To illustrate, when you travel
with old people
it will be so difficult to find a places
they like or they will be comfortable there . Correct the article-noun agreement
a place
places
In other words
, many people
needs
a Change the verb form
need
tour
guide
when thay
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they
travel
specifically old people
.
Moreover
, tour
guide
have Fix the agreement mistake
guides
a disadvantages
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a disadvantage
disadvantages
to
. Replace the word
too
Firstly
, it will take so much money in one day and not all of them are good . In other words
, if you take a bad and expensive tour
guide
you will be disappointed.
In conclusion, although
tour
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a tour
guide
may be not good some times
and Correct your spelling
sometimes
expensive
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is expensive
but
I believe that many Remove the conjunction
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people
needs
a Change the verb form
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tour
guide
when they travel
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Grammar
Try to avoid basic grammatical errors and pay attention to verb agreements and article usage.
Structure
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Vocabulary and Style
Use varied sentence structures to make your writing more engaging. Avoid repetition of words and phrases that make your essay sound monotonous.
Structure
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, fulfilling basic structural requirements.
Content
There are logical points made about the advantages and disadvantages of traveling with a tour guide, showing a balanced view.
Task Achievement
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite