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The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16 year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16 year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graphs illustrate the percentage of overseas languages
learnet
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learnt
learned
 by 14-16 years old students in
English speaking
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English-speaking
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 nations between 1984 and 2007.
Overall
, the
girls
 experienced more interest in learning foreign languages as compared to
boys
 in both years. Over the period of
time
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time,
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 both genders showed less interest in learning overseas
langauges
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languages
language
.Only
Spanish
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the Spanish
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 language increased in the final
year
. It is conspicuous that in the
year
 1984, 48% of
girls
 and 30% of
boys
,
those
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studied 50% of
French
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the French
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 language in 1984. In 1984 the total number of
girls
 and
boys
were
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was
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 68% and they studied German 20% in 1984, which is a huge gap between French and German language learners. The same amount of
boys
 and
girls
studied
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who studied
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 Spanish
were
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was
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 nearly 4% in the
year
 1984. Probing ahead, it can be seen from the chart
40
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that 40
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% of
girls
 and 25% of
boys
 those were studied French in 2007 nearly 25%, which was half
than
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that
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 in the
year
 1984.
Furthermore
, the total
boys
 and
girls
adudied
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added
studied
 15% German in the same
year
.
In addition
, the percentage of Spanish was 10% studied by the
boys
 and
girls
, those were in total 65% in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words girls, boys, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • modern foreign languages
  • English-speaking country
  • demographic
  • participation
  • gender disparities
  • trends
  • popularity rankings
  • analyzing
  • implications
  • cultural factors
  • economic ties
  • global job market
  • increasingly globalized
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