The two bar charts show the proportion of 14-16 year-old students studying a modern foreign language in an English Speaking country and the top three popular foreign languages. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The bar graphs illustrate the percentage of overseas languages

learnet

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learnt

learned

by 14-16 years old students in

English speaking

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English-speaking

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nations between 1984 and 2007.

Overall

, the

girls

experienced more interest in learning foreign languages as compared to

boys

in both years. Over the period of

time

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time,

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both genders showed less interest in learning overseas

langauges

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languages

language

.Only

Spanish

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the Spanish

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language increased in the final

year

. It is conspicuous that in the

year

1984, 48% of

girls

and 30% of

boys

those

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apply

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studied 50% of

French

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the French

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language in 1984. In 1984 the total number of

girls

and

boys

were

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was

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68% and they studied German 20% in 1984, which is a huge gap between French and German language learners. The same amount of

boys

and

girls

studied

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who studied

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Spanish

were

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was

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nearly 4% in the

year

1984. Probing ahead, it can be seen from the chart

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that 40

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% of

girls

and 25% of

boys

those were studied French in 2007 nearly 25%, which was half

than

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that

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in the

year

1984.

Furthermore

, the total

boys

and

girls

adudied

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added

studied

15% German in the same

year

In addition

, the percentage of Spanish was 10% studied by the

boys

and

girls

, those were in total 65% in 2007.

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