Both government investment in public transport systems and reductions in public transport ticket prices will help to reduce transport pollution greatly. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

Transportation
have
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become a vital
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of
growth
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the growth
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and sustainability of
the
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modern society, though it has become a concern in
regards
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to the pollution of
environment
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the environment
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. Many
people
believe that
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government funded
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transport
system
in addition
to its affordability can be the key to a cleaner
environment
. I strongly agree
to
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this
notion. In
this
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I will discuss my perception. Affordable public
transport
with amazing facilities can
deplate
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reduce
the necessity to purchase private
cars
among
people
. Because
government
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the government
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has
proper
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the proper
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budget to construct buses and metros
as well as
bus stations with facilities
such
as
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waiting
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and restrooms. Unlike private initiation, they do not aim to be profitable in a short time,
as a result
using these utilities can be affordable too. When the general public can experience these perks, they
wil
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will
scarcely have any reason to spend money to buy private
cars
.
For instance
,
people
of Dhaka city of Bangladesh, are now leaving their
cars
in the parking lot of the metro stations to take the newly constructed metro rails as it is
cheaper
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and faster mode of
transportation
.
In addition
to that,
maintenence
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maintenance
of these vehicles and enforcing various regulations in order to reduce carbon
emisson
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emissions
emission
can be done efficiently by
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the government
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if they have proper control over the
transport
system
. Because
,
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cars
with lack of
maintenence
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maintenance
and old parts are one of the culprits of excessive pollution by
cars
.
However
,
people
tend to forget and sometimes intentionally avoid servicing or replacing their
cars
or
its
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parts.
In addition
to that, if
government
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introduces a new law which is necessary for the
environment
, they can swiftly apply it
on
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the public
transportation
system
.
For example
, Japan's famous train
system
used to run on coal and diesel when it was first introduced, though it was replaced when the development of electric engine was deemed as a cleaner way of
transportation
.
To sum up
, low priced
government run
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transport
system
can improve the state of
the
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environment
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pollution. Because there will be
less
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private vehicles and
government
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the government
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will have better control over the
transportation
system
. I believe
this
is an important step towards a sustainable
environment
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable transport
  • carbon footprint
  • mass transit
  • subsidization
  • fare reduction
  • environmental impact
  • urban planning
  • public policy
  • commuter behavior
  • infrastructural development
  • economic efficiency
  • equitable access
  • lifestyle shift
  • congestion
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