The below graph shows the population of Japanese in the past, present, and future trends and table informs the number of people aged over 65 years old in 1950, in 2005, in 2035, and 2055
The chart depicts the trend of the population of
japanese
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Japanese
people
in three different times, the past, the present and the future time, while
the table presents data on the number
of elderly people
above the age of 65 years in four different years, 1950, 2005, 2035 and 2055. There is a correlation between the two graphs.
There were almost 85 million
people
in 1950 and number
continuously increased to reach Correct article usage
the number
the
peak Correct article usage
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at
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of
million
in 2005 before dropping to slightly over 125 million
in 2015. The number
dropped significantly for the next few decades and will predictably reach 89.9 million
in 2055.
In the table, old Japanese was only a little over 4 million
which accounted for 4.9% of the total population. The figure increased to 25.7 million
or exactly 20% in 2005 and will keep increasing to 37.2% in 2035. in 2055, although
predicted to drop to 36,5 million
, the proportion increases to 41%.
In conclusion, the two graphs describe the increasing trend of the number
of the
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apply
aging
society in Japan. Despite the fact that the Change the spelling
ageing
number
of people
increased greatly in 2005, it aligned with the increasing number
of ageing people
there. In the future, the trend is expected to be the same with more people
growing old and covering almost half of society in 2035.Submitted by kelly on
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